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/wg/ AUTHORS & FLASH FICTION: https://pastebin.com/ruwQj7xQ
RESOURCES & RECOMMENDATIONS: https://pastebin.com/nFxdiQvC

= WHEN POSTING FOR CRITIQUE =
- State whether you want feedback on prose, dialogue, pacing, general impressions, or if anything at all is fine.
- Give context. Short story, essay, chapter from a novel? Is it genre fiction? Standards and expectations vary based on what you're writing.
- If it's a first draft, say so. Most anons aren't willing to critique low effort writing samples, so edit and proofread.
- Images are more frequently engaged with than links, but do as you please. Pastebin often rejects content and doesn't allow italics, so rentry.co is the suggested alternative.
You're asking for a stranger's time and effort. Put some of your own in.

= BEGINNER RESOURCES =
These address mistakes often seen in excerpts posted here. If you are a beginner, please read them before submitting.
- Formatting Dialogue In Prose
https://kindlepreneur.com/how-to-format-dialogue/
- How To Use Commas Correctly
https://www.articulateediting.com/post/fiction-style-guide-commas
- Common "Weak Words" To Remove When Editing
https://kindlepreneur.com/words-to-avoid-in-writing/

post 'em

Post your complaints, suggestions, thoughts about the schlog, document history of it, et cetera. I aim for this to be basically the reverse of the kiwifarms sharty thread.

be me
32-year-old cop, just doing my job
small town, nothing crazy usually
get a call about a "suspicious figure" in a house
neighbor says they saw someone "lurking" through the window
roll up, standard procedure
knock on door, no answer
hear some weird noises inside, like high-pitched yelling
peek through window
see a tiny figure holding what looks like a weapon
it’s dark, can’t tell what’s going on
heart pounding, adrenaline kicks in
announce myself, “Police, open up!”
figure turns toward me, still holding the “weapon”
panic, draw my gun, yell “Drop it!”
they don’t, just freeze
split-second decision, fire one shot
figure drops
rush inside, flip on the lights
it’s a 4-year-old kid
trans flag sticker on their shirt, parents later confirm they were transitioning
no weapon, just a freaking Mario-themed Nintendo Switch controller
kid was playing Super Mario Odyssey, yelling at Bowser or some raisin
bullet hit their chest, they’re gone
parents come home 10 minutes later
screaming, crying, “Why’d you kill our baby?!”
chief puts me on leave, investigation pending
can’t sleep, keep seeing Mario’s stupid mustache in my nightmares
mfw I ended a kid’s life over a video game
mfw I’ll never unhear that coin collect sound in my head

ITT we post anything gemmy related to Despicable Me/ Minions as well as any 'tosses or discussion against gooning, fapping, and pornography
<reddit space
Any pornography and irrelevant coal is NOT ALLOWED on this thread.

Post your generals in this general

Jiren is weak.

Discuss these crazy ass women or something yeah